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Some people prefer to work in the same type of job throughout their lifetime while others like to change the type of job they do. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today's
life
job
 plays an important role in every
individuals
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life
. People get graduated from their Universities to land a
job
 in their area of interest while others come up with their own ideas to start an innovative thing.
Besides
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it
depens
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depends
 on their own
prospective
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perspective
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 whether to continue through the same
job
 or change the type of
the
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job
 they do. I would
elobrate
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elaborate
celebrate
 in
this
eassay
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essay
 on how the world is considering
this
 issue.
Firstly
, if people are in love with the
job
 they are doing, they would continue in their field for a lifetime. It is because they take challenges in
every day
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life
 and they meet them and achieve success in their professional
life
.
For instance
, considering Sundhara Pichaya the ECO of Google organisation, at
first
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he was one of the
employee
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employees
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 of the company, but he found his area of interest in it and achieved the milestone and today he is the head of the organisation.
Secondly
, there will be people who just
work
 to improve their financial status. If they find a better opportunity with
a
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better pay they would shift to
other field
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another field
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.
Besides
, there will be candidates who want to meet challenges in different areas to prove themself.
For example
, a person working as a software engineer might think of taking a new challenge in his
life
 and might shift from one type of
work
 to
other type
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another type
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 of
work
.
This
also
 helps in finding themself how they are able to face the challenges in today's world and
further
 it helps in knowing how the phase of the world is changing day
to day
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today
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. To conclude
this
, it completely depends on the individual on how he
deal
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deals
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his
work
life style
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lifestyle
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. If they are happy and meet their goals they would do the same kind of
work
 for their lifetime and if they are not happy with what they do in their
life
, they would switch to
d
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a
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ifferent kind of
work
 according to their area of interest.
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