Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary than ordinary workers. Employers' organizations say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, large organizations hire their boards of directors at higher compensation from their
market
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value. Human resource department
it
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is a necessary step to attract the best.
talent
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in their management
team
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. I believe, it is an essential
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for global companies to attract and retain the
right
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talent
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to maintain the
competive
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competitive
advantage in the
market
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diverse
exprience
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experience
and knowledge comes at a cost. Many
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companies
wants
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to hire the best
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leaders to provide their guidance and share their experience with
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members. Their
talent
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will help them to bring more
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, In initial years of Apple, Apple's board of directors fired Steve Jobs, after that company suffered
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loses till they were forced to bring him back on board directors. After
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he joined Apple again, it went onto
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world's most profitable technology manufacturer. Another reason
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spending huge amount of sum on
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talent
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to have
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ompetitive edge over their competitors. Every
companies
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wants
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to have an advantage and people are the biggest
assest
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asset
assets
of any organization. It is very important to have
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ight people in our company to have
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uccessful
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, A good leader can lift his
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to new
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heights
,
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whereas
a weak leader can run us out of the
business
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.
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, investing in
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ight people for our
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is essential. Companies are willing to pay extra to bring
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ight people on board to develop their
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and lift them towards success. In conclusion, I believe it is
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accurate
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to pay more to hire the
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and bring aboard on their
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. These expensive steps are taken for
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growth and expansion, and in hope that they will dominate their
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with
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ight minds on their
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