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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
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mprovement of your personality that has continued in your
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ry to find it,we should be honest to ourself.
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