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Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work.Other employers see no benefit in doing so.Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate,and reach a conclusion.

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There is a proverb saying, "
Health
 is wealth"
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 because being fit is not a choice or option. It is a must and should for everyone.
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, it
also
 helps in being focused and
develope
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develop
 our own peace. It is really a great innovative idea to subsidize membership of gyms and sports club to the employers. I would like to give a detailed explanation
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this
 debate with the possible pros. Today, people are really busy with overloaded schedules in their
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 and achieving their dreams. In the meantime, they are completely forgetting about their
health
 which leads to
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health
 issues in the future.
Maintaing
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Maintaining
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 a good wealth without
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ealthy
life
 is nothing. All the working employees should really focus on physical
activites
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activities
such
 as gym, yoga, sports etc. It not only helps in improving your
health
life
, but it
also
 makes
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 more effective in your
work place
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 and
improve
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 to analyse things.
Besides
, it
also
 reduces the stress level from your day to
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on the other hand
, people always come with a statement saying there is no use of
this
 and there is no time for it. It is surprising that
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 people of
this
 generation are not willing to allocate an hour of
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ime period for their
health
. It's really strange to listen to these words, but it is surprisingly true. The research says that
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 the ratio of the people who do physical
activites
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activities
 are
balalncing
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balancing
 their
lifestlye
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lifestyle
 in a much better way to the people who don't take part in physical activities. Taking part in physical exercises not only makes our body fit, but it
also
 helps in improving the function of the brain.
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, I suggest that every organisation should introduce
this
 system to make sure that their staff are healthy. Because if they are healthy and
activite
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active
activate
activities
 the company can run in
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uge amount of profits and increase the economy of the country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidized membership
  • physical activity
  • energy levels
  • employee productivity
  • work performance
  • sick leaves
  • healthier lifestyle
  • absenteeism
  • employee morale
  • workplace environment
  • employee retention
  • corporate image
  • branding
  • health and wellness benefits
  • top talent
  • healthcare costs
  • medical intervention
  • lack of usage
  • underutilization
  • alternative wellness programs
  • mental health resources
  • flexible working hours
  • professional development
  • individual responsibility
  • corporate responsibility
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