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Men and women are capable of doing all job equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #job
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centurary
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century
gender
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 doesn't specify
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apability of someone working on a
job
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 well.
Requirement
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The requirement
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 of any
job
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 is specified based on education ,skills and
work
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 ethics. If any individual full fill the
neccessecities
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necessities
 of position and have
e
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xpertise they will
work
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 well despite
of
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the
gender
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however
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, Personal values and physical structure from men to women are different that can be challenging in the few occupations. In my opinion
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few positions
does
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 require
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gender based
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 it all depends on talent. Talent is more required to
fullfill
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fulfil
 any
work
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 efficiently . A person working doesn't have
neccessary
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necessary
 skill will not be able to do the
job
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 correctly.
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a pilot
need
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 to go for
a
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 aviation training , if training has not correctly ,
p
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lane is bound to be crashed due to lack of technical knowledge
inspite
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. Both men and women are capable of flying a plane ,serving in
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ilitary and sailing a ship in
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avy in any nation. Few of the occupations
does
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 require personal and physical support which can
be differ
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 from male to female . occupation
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 as driving trucks and buses,mining and factory labour
are
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 based mostly on
gender
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 roles and tests
phyical
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physical
 strength and personal values .
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work
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 in mining required immense strength to break rocks and metal , Truck driver mostly spend half of their day on road and will be away from family which makes it
diffcult
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difficult
 to maintain
p
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a
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ersonal
life
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. In
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 kind of services industry mostly prefer male and have advertised only male
vaccancies
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vacancies
 in all platforms. In my opinion
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gender
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doesnt
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doesn't
 play any role in someone's skills
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 few occupations does require physical and mental support to perform the task . To
work
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 efficiently for any
job
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 a person
require
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 great techniques which can be learned from experience
inspite
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in spite
 of any
gender
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. few profession does require bodily structure and personal values which
are differ
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 from male to female as a female is
also
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 mother,daughter and a
home maker
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homemaker
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