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Traffic congestion is becoming more and more common in urban areas. What are the causes? What solutions can be adopted to solve this problem?

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Traffic gridlock is increasingly common in city
centers
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.
This
 essay will suggest that more people in urban areas are buying their own cars is the main cause of the problem and charging a higher
tax
 on peak hours is
the
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 viable solution to the problem. People
nowadys
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nowadays
 can easily purchase a
car
 because of the affordable downpayment
car
 dealers offer to prospective buyers.
As a result
, more vehicles run on the streets that
causes
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 massive traffic and long
que
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queue
 hours of waiting before drivers can move on to the
next
 street.
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, in the recent survey in The Times Magazine, a person who went to the shopping mall in 2019 took 3 hours from their house which was only about an hour to reach it three years ago. The best way to tackle
this
 issue is to impose
c
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ongestion
tax
 on vehicles. The new
tax
 gives the
car
 owners to think twice before using their automobiles during rush hour because of the additional expense they will incur.
For instance
, in the recent study conducted in New Delhi, traffic jam dropped down by approximately 30% from 4pm to 7pm after
c
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ongestion
tax
were
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 imposed three months ago. To conclude, the increasing number of
car
 ownership in recent years causes heavy traffic in metropolitan areas which
is
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 the main predicament people are facing and charging
tax
 on vehicles in busy times is an effective approach to answer
this
 issue.
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