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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the amount of using
water
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reason
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 in six different
countries
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.
Overall
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, most of the
countries
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 used
water
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agricultural
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whereas
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in
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North America and Europe used it for industry the most. In North America, 48% of
water
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 was used for industry.
This
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 is followed by the figure for
agricutural
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agricultural
usage
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 (39%) and domestic
usage
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 (13%) .
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Similarly
, in Europe, the proportion of using
water
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 for
indusry
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industry
 was 53% which
consitst
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consist
consists
 the most of the pie chart.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
agriculture
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usage
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 and domestic
usage
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were
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 32% and 18%
respectivaly
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respectively
.
However
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, other
countries
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 were different from these two
countries
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. Using
water
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 for
agricultureIn
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agriculture
 in South East Asia and Central Asia, Africa made up more than 80% which was the most of the pie chart. South Africa
also
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high
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 percentage of using
water
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 for Agriculture (70%)

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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