You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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Mr.

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Dunphy, I am writing

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letter to inquire about some electrical products. I recently came across your shop and observed it has plenty of options to choose from. I am planning to upgrade my kitchen with modern appliances. I am interested to buy

juicer

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and food processor. Juicer must have

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container and should come with easy fixing. For

food

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processor

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will

preffer

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one with meat mincing and vegetable chopping

option

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. It should

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have

blending

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jug for

smothies

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. can you provide me with details of all the options for these two appliances and

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the price. I like Kenwood products. Can the shop order online the requested model on my behalf, if it is not readily available

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I will be out of town for one week so

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would like to inquire after placing the order how long you can hold the item for me. Looking forward to hearing from you yours sincerely Saba Shaheen

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The Greeting

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Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Varied vocabulary

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Clear and correct grammar

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158 words

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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

The Greeting

In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impacts of aging population

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this .

Some people think there is no need for professional photographers as everybody knows how to click pictures. What is your opinion? Include any relevant personal experience and knowledge

in many countries around the world ,rural people are moving to cities,so the population in the countryside is decreasing. do you think this is a positive or a negative development?