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In most successful organizations, some people believe that communications between managers and workers are important, other people said that other factors are more important. What is your opinion?

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 effective communication, I believe that innovation and vision of the leaders are key to business success.
Firstly
, companies could put
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substantial
 resources into inspiring employees to develop new ideas, which can greatly contribute to creating innovative products with higher quality. In
this
 way, they can gain a sense of satisfaction of customers, which might enable them to
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 consumers’ trust and loyalty.
Such
 customers can help companies share information about the brands through word of mouth, meaning they can increase sales volume without having to pay large amounts for marketing campaigns.
Secondly
, proper vision could motive employees towards achieving the same goals as
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ompany could have clear directions to steer its growth and gather talent with the same mindset.
Finally
,
such
 practices can allow the company to thrive in the market, during which effective internal communication can be naturally created.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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