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Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society.

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It is irrefutable that the trend of people growing number has taken a mammoth dimension. There are debates between those who believe that
overpopulation
 can cause severe problems in the entire world and those who think that increasing rates of
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opulation may have
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ositive impact on global financial and social factors.
This
 essay will examine both views before giving a final opinion. On the one hand,
overpopulation
 can lead to a lack of vital resources. Food products, fossil and drinking water – without these things humans are tend to die.
For instance
, People suffer from drought and famine in some parts of India where
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uantity of people surpasses the daily consumption norm of food.
Moreover
, these people are trapped
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 the circle of poorness and unemployment.
Therefore
, they unable to buy even a piece of bread.
On the other hand
,
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ncrease in
population
 can have certain positive impacts on economy and society.
To begin
, countries with
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igh level of
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opulation as a rule never experience
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 shortage.
Therefore
, some countries with lower populace level attract immigrants to fill their gaps in the labour market.
Furthermore
,
overpopulation
 can cause healthy competition among citizens.
For example
, Chinese motivated to study hard because of the huge number of people per
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working place.
As a result
, citizens of China are tent to be highly qualified and skilled in comparison with other nations. To put in a nutshell, even
although
overpopulation
 has some demerits as
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ack of essential for life resources, it has
also
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ertain positive impact on the World’s economy and society.
Therefore
, I believe that some measures should be taken to equal distribution of
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opulation over the world.
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