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In many countries senior positions have higher salary compare to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree and disagree.

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In these days, maximum workers get
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good payment according to their skills, learning as well as the knowledge they have. Some people believe that top rack employees highly paid as compare to newcomers in the institutions while others have argued about that. According to my mind, getting
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good amount at a high position is not bad at all.
To begin
 with, some portion of public concerns about salaries that are on top of the workplace because they believe
this
 creates discrimination among the labour. Those having strong financial corner they have luxuries car and branded clothes to show off at performance area
thus
 it has a negative influence on the co-workers. On the other side, people get high salary as they earn it by their efforts and they should be because they have more responsibilities as well.
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if a mangers get big amount but they
work
 for it as compared to others they have more duties to perform.
Secondly
, the experience in the specific field had good offers of wage as their knowledge and skills going to help the organization to develop.
This
 will motivate other workers to polish the skills so can get per-motion.
Additionally
, helping hand get higher pay at more responsible positions as they earn that with hard
work
 and struggle, so
this
 is their right. They should be getting maximum with more workload.
For instance
, a person did M.B.A but the
second
 one completed secondary education they
work
 for the same company but the employee had M.B.A got more because of the education and skills he learned through education. To epilogue, getting more at high position is the right of the worker in any
work
 area. As a good salary package come with numerous duties and workload on the shoulders.
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