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You have seen an advertisement in a newspaper for a job in the city post office during your holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the post office. In your letter, • introduce yourself • explain what experience and special skills you have • explain why you are interested in the job

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I write in response to the job advert for temporary job posts published in the newspaper on 10th of November 2020. I am twenty-four years old, resident of
this
 city pursuing post-graduation in Finance and Accounting at Duke
university
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University
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 and currently, I am on my summer holidays for three months. I saw an advertisement in
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 for the 10 temporary posts of
cleric
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a cleric
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 in your department,
thus
 I am applying for
this
 vacancy. About my
education
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 background and experience, I am a commerce graduate and have acquired professional certification in Modern Financial strategies. Along with
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 I have worked as a trainee in one of the Multi-national financial companies namely "ATS finance" for a year. As mentioned earlier, I am presently enrolled in
post-graduation
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a post-graduation
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 course in Finance and Accounting so,
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a job
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job related
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 to
this
 will expand my carrier
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perspective
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prospective
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perspective
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 and I will get
a
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apply
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better hand on experience to enhance my knowledge about
this
 domain. I look forward to receiving your response.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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