Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: -what are the changes -what are the problems you are facing -what part of the service would you like to change

Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you about some problems that I am encountering due to the recent changes
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your transport service and requesting you to review these. According to your updated rules, your buses are stopping few stops
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earlier.
Besides
, you have minimized the number of fixed available for
woman
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. These changes have caused significant inconvenience for me. Earlier, I used to get on the vehicle from the
bus-stop
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near to my residence, whereas now, I have to walk
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distance
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to do so.
As a result
, at present, I
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late for
office
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.
Besides
, reducing ladies seats let many of the women like me
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travel standing in the bus, which is really uncomfortable. I am a regular passenger of your
trasnport
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transport
and I know there are many travellers are in
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area who are facing
such
inconvenience for these
upgradation
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up-gradation
of service rules. In
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circumstances, it would be great if you could remain the Banasree station and increase seats for females considering the
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aforementioned
problems. Yours sincerely, Taslima
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