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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less. You should write at least 250 words.

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onsumption of drinks with
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 increasing.
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erious issue because it affects
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the health badly.
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 of drink, before proposing two solutions
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 of the most important causes of drinking a drink is that it is tasty. Majority of people consume it because of taste.
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eople are having a coke, because it is yummy. The other cause is linked with
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rize. People use
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-based drinks because they are cheaper than drinks without
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. Many companies replace
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 to many natural components, because of
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rize. Natural components are more expensive than
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.
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atural drink with fruit are using not only fruit, they use
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, water and other things.
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, people should
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onsequences of drinks with
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 are really bad, and there are too many illnesses with
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. And because of that they
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 to minimize the
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 of drinks. There are many drinks which have a low amount of
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. People can use them
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everage with
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. In conclusion, the using of
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-based drinks are unhealthy and people should minimize the
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 of these drinks.
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