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With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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advance
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advances
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of
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in
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 technology
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and the invention of the
internet
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people
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, people
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 can freely share their
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 about specific products and services which they have received and paid for
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, which
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 can be considered
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a positive development.In
this
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
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 an improvement. On one hand,the
internet
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 has positive effects on the way consumers can express their opinion about certain goods or
repairing
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 services
given
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provided
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from
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 each brand or company.
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 can provide a source of information which will lead other consumers to make better decisions about what they
have
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apply
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a
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plan to buy, by reading reviews within a few clicks.
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,when a person decides to buy an electronic device ,whether online or in the store,
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beforehand,
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 he can search the intended products’ brand directly on the Google website and immediately can read recommendations of
people
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 who have had
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it and
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then
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if
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, if
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 they were mostly affirmative ,it would be logical to buy.In my opinion,
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 technology-related developments aid us to enjoy a better quality of life
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 a wide variety of information can be gained from it.
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,as an increasing number of
people
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 have access to the
internet
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, lots of
data
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the data
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 found there might not be valid.
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not be
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 only
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 bad
intention
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intentions
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 but
also
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 variations
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in
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 different
people
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’s
taste
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tastes
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.
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,some
people
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 might leave comments about a specific product or service
while
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 they have never purchased it.They do
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 false data because of their bad intentions or personal animosity.
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secondly
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Secondly
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 all buyers do not expect the same things from what they want to buy
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therefore
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therefore,
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 others’
opinion
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opinions
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Might
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might
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 not be useful for them.
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,
People
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 might have different
taste
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tastes
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 in colours,designs
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, and
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this
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 can vary their expectations of goods from one to another
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, so
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on
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such
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 things should not be taken into account .
To conclude
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,it is undeniable that the evolution of the
internet
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 has
helpt
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helped
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people
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 to express their ideas about what they pay for,
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 as goods and maintenance services.Even though
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 freedom in sharing views might not be beneficial sometimes,I believe that
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 is a positive development and
make
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makes
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 the
decision making
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decision-making
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 easier for
people
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.

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language
Fix big grammar and spell mistakes. Use short, clear sentences.
structure
Use punctuation well. Put a full stop at the end of each sentence; use commas to slow thoughts.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a clear idea sentence and then add a few points.
content
You cover both sides and give your view.
content
You use an example about online reviews to support your point.
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