Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that presenting outdoor and having some activities there are more helpful for

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young kids than to spend their time playing computer games.

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that fresh air games and face to face communication with

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can contribute more to

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child’s development than sitting in front of a laptop for several hours. The

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reason fresh air activities are better to join is the possibility to improve a child’s learning achievement. Children

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to spend at school for approximately eight hours on the constant base and it is obligatory for them to dedicate several hours after their study day for the rest. Being outside after classes would help kids to regenerate their brain activity and add extra forces for

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doing homework in subsequent hours. To illustrate, it is a worldwide fact, that fresh air stimulates neuro activity for 30% of everybody’s brain and allow a person to continue studying with a faster pace.

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, outside activities on the playground would encourage a child to get acquainted with new kids, that would probably lead to a meeting with new friends.

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same-aged community for a child has always been a new experience and should

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ocial development of a kid.

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, social mobility always benefits for adolescents in terms of adaptivity to people’s environment, because the interactions starting on a playground reveals a real adult’s relationships waiting for children in the nearest future. As an example, a famous Russian singer Fillip Kirkorov has always been a very communicative person and in his previous interview

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he told that a feature of social flexibility was mostly formed in his childhood during after classes activities. To conclude, humans consider

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able to help children in development more than playing computer games by giving children an opportunity to improve both their intellectual and social skills.

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type of time spending would definitely more valuable than computer games playing.