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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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recent years, the popularity of
air
 services has been in demand. Some people claim that
air
traffic
 causes inevitable
pollution
; others see the other side of the coin. I disagree that government bodies are obliged to decrease
air
traffic
 using taxation. To start with, heavy taxation would largely affect the
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 families as compared to the elite class. Mostly the members of the mediocre families travel around the globe to earn
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ivelihood. In some cases, meritorious students of
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 families
also
 use the airline service, if they get enrolled in
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 universities of the world.
For example
, statistics illustrated that
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 passenger of
air
traffic
 are students.
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, heavy taxation would enhance
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roubles of the students and
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verage group.
In addition
 to
this
, governments need to consider re-examining the approach to the eco-system.
Air
traffic
 plays a negligible role
towards
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pollution
 in comparison with other sources of
pollution
. There are various other varieties of
pollution
 that have been increased up to an alarming level.
For instance
, most of the countries are affected by smog, the main causes of which are
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moke of factories and non-catalytic converted vehicles.
Similarly
, the prime cause of noise
pollution
 is the
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se of horn of motor vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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