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Some people say that self employment is better than a job in a country or an institution. Discuss both modes of work and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, selecting a career is the biggest challenge for everyone. Few of the people believe that it is better to do business
instead
 of working for a company. On the one hand, business entitles with flexible timings along with immense earning opportunities,
on the other hand
, employment provides fixed payment and involves
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igid schedule. In my opinion,
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enefits of owning a firm
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 the benefits of working for someone. The profession we select for our life should provide financial freedom along with adaptable roster. With own merchandise, a person can achieve both because there is no limitation on how much an individual can earn being an owner and more so, open
work
 schedule helps them to enjoy quality time with their friends and family.
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, an article in “The Times”- stated that 70% of
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otal global population, all wealthy people have their own profession or
work
.
On the other hand
, employment gives you
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secure money for living but with
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ixed job schedule. The result of which, mankind can raise limited income in his entire life and being strict
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 hours, they fail to spend much time with their close relatives.
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, a survey done by “Harvard University” stated that
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ajority of people working in a company or a firm, spend only 10% of their life with their wife and children. Henceforth, keeping above discussion into consideration, in my opinion,
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erson’s establishment has an edge over the fixed pay-check assignments due to endless economic growth opportunities plus allow adequate free time with loved ones. In conclusion, a portion of
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eneration has a belief that doing commerce benefits more than contractual
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 for an organization. I do agree with
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assive chance to earn money along with flexible-timings.
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