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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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According to the Earth’s temperate change, the government and relevant organizations try to revise new rules. Some people argue that all corporations would struggle with these alternatives, but others claim that the revisions could bring positive results through appropriate advertisements. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on both the merits and demerits aspects of it. On one hand, there are several downdraws of new regulations. All businesses would try to intensively concern about the environment because of that.
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 the environmentalists had maintained the reasons for getting worse situations
such
 as increasing sea levels and melting the iceberg might cause by weaving industries. So, trades could not develop several areas for utilizing natural resources or would have to pay plenty of fees.
Therefore
, many enterprise owners insist they will not provide appropriate treatment for their government.
On the contrary
, these initiatives have merits as well. When the promotions maintain the green business to the public through the advertisements or mass media, they could improve their business style as the well-cultivated image. Because of
this
, the agencies will grow the values and have
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wise customers who took care of
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nvironment. On top of that, the employments
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creative ideas whey they imagine that they were working for our
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Earth. To sum up, the alternative for changing climate temperature,
although
 having adverse factors
such
 as too heavy tax and strong initiative, would bring positive results for both the business industry and our environments.
Consequently
, many corporations try to manage useful ways of sophisticated advertisement, including conserving nature.
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