It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.

It has become apparent in recent
time
that a
lot
of families do not get on well as they used to be. Some people concerned about
this
. Less and
less
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fewer
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people meet and
communication
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communicate
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with each other. They stop sharing their dreams and problems. Let us look at the reason for
this
behavior
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behaviour
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s
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ame families.
First
, Children start living alone when they grow up. They moved
in
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different cities, so they rarely see with immediate family. The distance between cities is large and difficult to meet often. It is
sadly
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,
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because parents wont to see their children.
Second
. Modern world does not give you free
time
to meet your family. People are very busy. Young people study a
lot
. They always get their education. Old people always work hard to provide for their family. It is very difficult to find
time
for
communication
with
l
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oving family.
Next
, a very important reason is modern gadgets, especially phones. A
lot
of people sit
in
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social networks. Children always game on the phone. Modern gadgets can help people and can separate from each other. A
lot
of
family
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families
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just do not have
time
for
communication
with
n
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uclear family. All family should be as close. Nothing can replace
communication
with loved ones. Psychologists recommend limiting children to game on the phone or computers.
Also
, all people should
to
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meet with their relatives. Wrong when people are not as close as they used to be. Let us put our problems aside and start communicating with family.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • family interactions
  • technological advancements
  • virtual interactions
  • dual-income households
  • urbanization
  • migration
  • social structures
  • individualism
  • family cohesiveness
  • belonging
  • open communication
  • emotional support
  • shared activities
  • family dynamics
  • work-life balance
  • family traditions
  • regular gatherings
  • counseling
  • family therapy
  • prioritizing family time
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