When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Dear Mary I'm writing
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letter yo ask you to join me to take up an exercise. As you know, I have a problem with high cholesterol recently after I checked annual health
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week.
Doctor
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said I should work out more if I don't want to meet him again. I
also
think take up an exercise will help us
relaxing
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after hard working days. I intend to go swimming in the swimming pool at the apartment near our company. It is
a
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indoor swimming pool so we can come to work out whenever we have free time without afraid of the sun or rain. After that, we could have dinner at the nearby restaurant. It is so convenient, isn't it? If you and
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go swimming together, we will have
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funnier and relax after
stressfull
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working hours.
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, taking up an exercise with you will make me
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to practise more often. Let me know what you think. Cheers Your friend - Minh.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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