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Advances in science and technology and others areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this opinion?

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Recent inventions in science and improvements in the tech areas and various other fields have completely changed the human activity in the
last
 century.
Life
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 expectancy of masses has
also
 increased which makes them
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live more as compared to past. There is an ongoing debate that
this
 is the best time human
life
 can enjoy, and I partially agree with
this
 statement. To embark on, there are several reasons to believe that the individuals now have much convenient
life
.
First
, medical field inventions proved as
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oon for everyone. Diseases that seemed unconquerable 50 years ago
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 are now treated easily.
For example
, Chickenpox was considered
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deadly in
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950s, but now, thanks to the doctors, it cannot take away a person’s
life
.
Second
, enhancement in the transportation network made the availability of food to
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every corner of the world.
In other words
, people do not die from a deadly famine now and it was common 100 years ago.
However
, there is another school of thought too. It says that recent discoveries
also
 have some drawbacks that have made our society depressed, lonely and filled with various diseases.
For instance
, internet and social sites have made people addicted to them, and real-
life
 interactions have taken back seat. Some of the gifts from the science are now proving as curses. Green Revolution that completely changed the agriculture in India, is now thought as responsible for declining the water level in Punjab and Haryana, and the day will come
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 when no water will be left to use. Overall, Science and other fields have given us
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lethora of things to make our
life
 convenient and easy, but we should keep in mind that an invention should always be sustainable
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 so that it does not prove detrimental to our future generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life expectancy
  • Medical advancements
  • Innovations
  • Quality of life
  • Transportation
  • Agricultural developments
  • Food security
  • Educational reforms
  • Cybersecurity
  • Privacy concerns
  • Automation
  • Environmental concerns
  • Climate change
  • International cooperation
  • Developed and developing countries
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