The advantages of robots doing the basic serving functions in the entertainment, leisure and retail sectors of the economy outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, we are in the fourth industrial revolution in which the retail and business are replacing workers with
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obot as well. While there are some benefits for employers, it
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some drawbacks for the economy. On the one hand, it is clear that using
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obot would create several advantages.The
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and the foremost advantage of having robots in workplaces is their cost, robots are much cheaper than humans and their cost is now decreasing. It’s a fact that we cannot compare human abilities with robots but robotic capabilities are now growing quickly.
For example
, if you run an essay writing service, you can use robots to perform every kind of research related to any subject.
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, robots can
work
anywhere in any environmental condition whether it is space, underwater, in extreme heat or wind,... It can be used everywhere where human safety is a huge concern.
Finally
, the best thing about robots is that they never get tired and can literally
work
on certain tasks 24/7. To be more specific, the human brain gets tired if it’s working continuously but robots never get tired of what they are programmed to do and they can
work
on certain tasks
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However
, using robots does not always have beneficial effects. There are several negative aspects to be taken into consideration.
Firstly
, where robots are increasing
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efficiency in many businesses, are
also
increasing the unemployment rate. Because of robots, human labour is no longer required in many factories and manufacturing plants.
Secondly
, Robots installed in workplaces still require manual labour attached to them and training those employees on how to
work
with the robots definitely has a cost attached to it. To sum up, the robots can bring many benefits to the economy but it’s just a machine so we can’t expect too much from them so that we shouldn’t depend on the robot.
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