It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media . What do you think is the reason for a growth in the rate of juvenile crime? What solution can you offer to deal with this situation?

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Level of juvenile crime is increasing nowadays because of
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emonstration of
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​ in social media and its influence on the youth. There are some negative factors that can provoke
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and it is possible to cut
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process.
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, young people try to interact
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ocial network, but there isn’t any strong censorship.
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, those who support overspread of ideas through the internet have abilities to control all over the world. Unfortunately, any videos with
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and scenes of struggle have got high rates of views and attract younger generations. Media managers get benefits and profit enough to protect and lobbying interests of media magnates who produce
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kind of movies.
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, governments of countries should respond on time, but the internet communication and net development are growing up faster and more effectively than any governmental institutions and restraining laws. On
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basis, teenagers cannot feel any conviction and nobody tells them what is prohibited and what is allowed.​ When any conflict appears in their lives, their reactions are illogical and emotional as they see on the internet that everyone has full power and they can establish their own rules.
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young people can go to jail easily. We can find out some ways to react and solve
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ncreasing of
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, social systems should involve more young people to do sport, participate in youth organizations, get grant money for start-ups.
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most talented students should have possibilities to continue their educational course abroad freely.
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, children need activities with real friends and establish social communications with their peers. If any dangerous situation
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, close friends can stop by immediate reactions and protect from
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hreat. In conclusion,
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children are exposed to
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and crime, if we take appropriate measures we can reduce their rate of offences committed by youngers members of
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