Some people think that is it a good thing for senior management to have very high salary compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, all corporates have a diverse range of designation structure ranging from top to bottom
management
, and
this
has spurred
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arguments

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agruments
that, senior
management
should be compensated with higher remuneration
in contrast
to the
people
working in the bottom segment of the same
company
. I completely agree with
this
statement as senior
management
is the brain of the
company
and their hardships and decisions should be compensated with more salary. On one hand, The senior
management
is involved in all the imperative
decision
makings and its roadmap to success. The ideas on future endeavours of
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a
company
success, are often very risky, stressful and reckon decisiveness. Any wrong
decision
may lead to
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c
ompany's downfall
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apply

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,
and often results in
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the

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f
iring of the
people
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at

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in
the top of the pyramid. The middle and lower
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position

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positon
people
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facilitate

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facilitates
these ideas and implements the same in the day to day business hours through proper guidance of the seniors. They are not directly
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affected

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effected
by any wrong
decision
,
hence
they are not much
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in
risk with their job as compared to
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its
higher level. To exemplify, whenever a
company
commits a mistake in
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a

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b
usiness
decision
, the top tier
people
like CEO, CFO and CMO are always shown the door, as they are blamed for their decisions.
On the other hand
, all top tier
people
in an organization has climbed the corporate ladder through their intelligence, sheer resilience &
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hard work

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hardwork
.
Therefore
, If their
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hard work

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hardwork
is not compensated with their high salary,
then
employees
will stop vying with each other due to lack of motivation. The term success among
employees
will not exist as no will be ardent about their job and
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therefore

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therfore
establishing a casual approach.
For example
, if there is
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a

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f
ixed remuneration for all tiers of
employees
, there will be no motivation to
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succeed

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succed
further
.
Furthermore
, it
also
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affects

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effects
the hiring aspects of an employee, who will never join somewhere where there is
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a

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l
ack of growth. To conclude, Top tier
employees
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deserve

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deserves
a higher pay, taking into
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apply

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the
consideration their daring
decision
making which eventually makes a
company
grow.
Hence
it involves a great deal of risk as well which is not passed on to the subordinates.
Moreover
, these positions
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are

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is
often
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achieved

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achived
through intelligence,
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hard work

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hardwork
and resilience which exemplifies the
employees
that they can
also
reach the same position if they follow the same path and that provides quite a motivation to achieve more.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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