Science tell us about both activities which are good for health and others which are bad. Millon of people all over the world know this and still do unhealthy activities. Why do you think this is and what can be done to change it ?

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its
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positive
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and negative sides. Some
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think it is good for human well-being,
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, some
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use science to do negative
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.
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of all, the reason why
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continue to do unhealthy things is that they have too much stress
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as the problem of working condition, family relationship and friendship.
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means
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may take illegal
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which
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invented by scientists who tend to have bad purposes.
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, young
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often suffer from
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case as they may face different setbacks during their growth and friends between youth may try to attract them to take the
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. Those are the reasons for some
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keep doing unhealthy behaviours.
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, negative
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can earn lots of money is another reason for some
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doing these
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such
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as selling
drugs
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.
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many
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addict
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on using
drugs
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for release pressure, party excitement and medical treatment. Some
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think
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organise a market to sell
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can earn money easily and there are
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some
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need them.
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, for
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inancial aspect,
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rather risk themself for survival than not stop doing
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bad
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.
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, I think governments should manage
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to decrease unhealthy
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which is a threat
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people
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’s health.
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, professional license
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to
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be hold
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for someone who
selling
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drugs
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and teach them the right method of using it
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as the maximum amount of using.
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, giving warning and apply
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enalty for those of who selling
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without
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icense and someone who overtaking it, or even sending them to jail if they addict on
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seriously and provide a quitting drug lesson. In conclusion,
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there are positive things
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science,
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still
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some drawbacks,
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as illegal
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. In my view,
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overnment should produce some useful policy to avoid it continues
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happen
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