Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
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think that
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games
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are not only a
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game but
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a useful educational tool, while other
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hold the belief that
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games
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will harm the
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playing them.
This
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essay attempts to discuss both views before coming to a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand,
video
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games
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have a bad effect on
people
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who play them.
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of all, some
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may affect the behaviour or the characteristics of the child. There are more and more violent
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being produced and
children
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who are not able to recognise them. When they play a lot of violent
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,
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may have an adverse effect on their growth.
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, playing
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games
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too much may lead to some bad effects
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our physical health. If we sit in one place to play
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games
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for a long time, our eyes will easily short-sighted or we
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have
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ackache.
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who play
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so much they will easily experience depression because they do not communicate with other
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.
On the other hand
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,
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games
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have a wide range of benefits if we use it in the right way.
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,
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can learn a lot of grammar or vocabulary of foreign languages which they are interested in. Some
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games
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are produced by some foreign engineers so that
people
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can choose the language which they want to improve their skills or their vocabularies.
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, some
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games
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are produced to meet our educational needs. In the market, there
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a wide range of
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games
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which educate
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such
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as educating them to recognise colour and how to use colour to decorate the room or some cooking
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can educate a child to cook some easy foods. In conclusion,
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games
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have a lot of merits and shortcomings. To my point of view, the disadvantages of
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games
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may be weighed by the advantages if we can manage time to play
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. And parents should know what kind of
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their
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are playing so that they can prevent
children
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if they play some violent
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.
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