Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many
people
think that
video
games
are not only a
funny
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game but
also
a useful educational tool, while other
people
hold the belief that
video
games
will harm the
people
playing them.
This
essay attempts to discuss both views before coming to a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand,
video
games
have a bad effect on
people
who play them.
First
of all, some
games
may affect the behaviour or the characteristics of the child. There are more and more violent
games
being produced and
children
who are not able to recognise them. When they play a lot of violent
games
,
it
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may have an adverse effect on their growth.
In addition
, playing
video
games
too much may lead to some bad effects
for
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our physical health. If we sit in one place to play
video
games
for a long time, our eyes will easily short-sighted or we
also
have
b
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ackache.
People
who play
games
so much they will easily experience depression because they do not communicate with other
people
.
On the other hand
,
video
games
have a wide range of benefits if we use it in the right way.
Firstly
,
people
can learn a lot of grammar or vocabulary of foreign languages which they are interested in. Some
video
games
are produced by some foreign engineers so that
people
can choose the language which they want to improve their skills or their vocabularies.
Secondly
, some
video
games
are produced to meet our educational needs. In the market, there
are
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a wide range of
video
games
which educate
children
such
as educating them to recognise colour and how to use colour to decorate the room or some cooking
games
can educate a child to cook some easy foods. In conclusion,
video
games
have a lot of merits and shortcomings. To my point of view, the disadvantages of
video
games
may be weighed by the advantages if we can manage time to play
games
. And parents should know what kind of
games
their
children
are playing so that they can prevent
children
if they play some violent
games
.
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