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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a workplace every day. Do you you agree or not ?

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It goes without saying that modern technology has transformed the way that we live today. A popular stratum of society tends to believe that working from
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 becomes ubiquitous these days. I would like to elucidate both positive and negative impacts before forming an opinion
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 with, on the positive sides, individuals go for
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 rather than in offices.
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, in
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 pandemic,
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 as covid-19, there are restrictions on to go outside from
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, and precautions are a must.
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, it is safer to
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, and technology makes it easier On the flip side, it is problematic for some individuals, who live in joint families or in less spacious apartments.
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, people who belong to rural areas, there is no good internet connections, and they suffer
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ot of trouble to
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.
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,due to living with families and poor internet connections in rural areas facing
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truggle in working from
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. In conclusion, it is beneficial for employees to
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 from
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 in covid-19, but
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 is not fruitful in rural areas.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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