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In many places, new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe ing it is more important do protect the countryside and not build new homes there what is your opinion about this ?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
At the moment that problem is very actually. A lot of
people
 need houses but there same
people
 live in the countryside and love there way of the life. My opinion is that
people
 who live in countryside have old outlook on life because they do not want live in the city and they like everything old. But
also
 I understand them because they live
next
 to nature and these are already different emotions and feelings.
First
, nature is beautiful,
for example
, in the morning you can go out and have a look at the nice sunrise.
Secondly
, it is a fresh air, if you look at it from a point of view ecology
then
 living in
such
 place is delightful. In the
third
, these are sounds: no loud cars and sounds of signals, but only the sounds of birds are the sounds of the wind. But I understand
people
 who need houses and if a lot of
people
 can fit in high-rise buildings. You always have to sacrifice something.
People
 can fit everything if they save space and do not build separate one-story houses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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