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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a lot of talks about subjects we should learn in
school
 and the discussion becomes more and more significant. Some people call
History
 the essential subject, which cannot be faded away, while others fight for Science and Technology as for the most important ones in
modern
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 digital world. On the one hand, it is quite hard to imagine a
school
 without
History
 in the schedule as we were told yeas by years about its importance. The main point devotees pay attention to is that
history
 gives us useful and invaluable lessons, which are necessary for building
strong
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 and flourishing future. They believe in the wheel of
history
. It goes round and round, whereas people try not to repeat horrible mistakes of
past
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. It is said that if we forget about them, we will repeat them over and over, planting nothing but wars and suffering.
On the other hand
, the modern world changes extremely fast and we need to stay up-to-date and keep in touch with it. Some people think that new
technologies
 that appear almost every day define the rules of
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 society we live in.
Consequently
, we have to learn Science and
Technologies
 from childhood and study these disciplines at
school
 as well.
For example
, some years ago we used paper books and dictionaries for doing homework,
however
, nowadays children are more used to gadgets and computers and learn subjects via the Internet. In my opinion, all three subjects are of high importance. Nor
History
, neither Science or
Technologies
 should be rejected from the
school
 program. The new brave world, where artificial intelligence and virtual reality are no more writers’ dreams but the everyday routine, demands high knowledge of
technologies
. At the same time, it definitely has no chance to survive without essential values and lessons the
history
 can give.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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