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Some people believe government should spend money on building railway tracks to reduce traffic congestions others think building more wider roads are the better way to reduce the traffic congestion. Discuss both views.

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In the present era, with the advancement in ,technology everyone likes to travel and explore more and more with a convenient mode of transportation. One portion of the society in the favour of invest valuable resources in public
transport
 while others preferred
roads
 should be renovated is a better utilization of money.
This
 essay will explicate both aspects briefly. To commence with, travel by own vehicle is a popular trend nowadays so, if authorities spend on the construction of the
roads
 that assist to move fast traffic on
roads
 and saves time. That raises independence among the drivers.
Secondly
, building and maintenance of
roads
 have less expensive because it needs more raw material
that is
 easily available.
However
, trains are eco-friendly and easily affordable and accessible to everyone for a longer and shorter distance. At the same ,time maximum number of individuals move together and that requires a small portion of fuel and space for its survival as well as decrease the amount of pollution on the
roads
 that ultimately lead to less dirty air and noise in the environment.
Additionally
, public
transport
 offers long term employment services, denote to raise government revenue.
For instance
, to maintain railway that requires a large network of people and that offers an opportunity for new vacancies and money earned by selling tickets to utilizing
transport
 services. I read in an article that the government has the plan to implement more solar trains in near future so, would definitely give wonderful results for the environment and finances as well. To epilogue, both notions have their own positive aspects. As the interest has changed regarding the modes of transportation after
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 all aspects I believe public
transport
 facilitates much better in many ways as a comparison with private mode.
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