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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.do you agree or disagree

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is often argued that it is more advantageous to choose a
job
 with high wage rather than
job
satisfaction
.I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and
i
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 believe
job
satisfaction
 is incredibly important than
salary
. One good reason to hold
this
 view is that
job
satisfaction
 gives people a sense of fulfilment that no money can guarantee.Even if someone earning a high
salary
,but feels tensed and compromised with a conscience,he would not enjoy his life.While pursuing one's interests will always bring pleasure and a feeling of
satisfaction
.
For instance
, a lot of researchers in the world keep up with their role in researching academic issues in society with low income because they are passionate about science.
That is
 why it is more important to choose the kind of work that makes happy than to look at a high
salary
. Another point to consider is that doing what you like keeps you motivated and
therefore
 leads to career growth. In other words, there is a strong relationship between
job
satisfaction
 and productivity.People who love their jobs can easily excel in their fields of works and achieve better results than those ,who put
salary
 in the
first
 place.
For example
surabhi
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jain
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Jain
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 who quit her
job
 at
google
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Google
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 due to interest in dance and today she is
well known
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 dancer world wide.So opt
that
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 type of
job
 which gives pleasure and sharp skills than more money. In conclusion,to live
happy
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 and relaxed life I believe we should choose our interest
first
 rather than high remuneration.People who
works
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 for money reach
no where
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 and always left their jobs in middle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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