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Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to this? Do you think that advantages outweigh the disadvantage?

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These days, many people enjoy having
meals
 more compared to the past. The things that made it possible are preservatives and chemicals in processed
foods
 and ready-made
meals
. In my view, the simplicity to prepare and the ability to be preserved outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, its simplicity allows cooks to prepare delicious
meals
 easily. As processed
foods
 are born in order to reduce the processing time, generally individuals can eat them by just boiling or baking even without seasoning.
This
 might be a significant advantage for busy modern persons as those
foods
 let them
also
 relish daily
meals
.
Secondly
, its capability of saving is crucial not only in daily life
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 but
also
 in an emergency situation. For general days, as modern people are busy and have less time to go shopping, pre-cooked
foods
 will save them by reducing the need for the frequency of getting products.
Moreover
, as persons should prepare
meals
 for emergency circumstances, preservable
foods
 are useful in order to be ready for the time at emergency which is unpredictable when it comes. Contrary, some people say that preservatives and chemicals
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 in pre-prepared
meals
 might have detrimental effects
for
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 health and it will overweigh the advantages.
However
, even the chemicals have negative effects on the human body, since the food companies are responsible to produce those
foods
, the damage to customers’ health must not be
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. In conclusion, since the disadvantage is not sizable, the advantages which are its ease and
preserveness
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preserves
 will outweigh the disadvantages.
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