one people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views on what
subjects
were focused on by
students
in their
study
. Some people believe that
students
ought to learn all
subject
when they are in school while I agree with those who think that teenagers should concentrate on the most
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or best
subjects
which were found by
students
. On one hand, the curriculum is found the most suitable for all
students
.
First
of all, all
subjects
were verified by the Ministry of Education so the teenager can be follow those
subject
for the time when they
study
.
Such
as mathematic helps
students
has better at calculating, history brings
student
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the student
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to historic place or event.
In other words
, all
subject
are quite significant for
the
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preparation before teenagers find their jobs.
On the other hand
,
subjects
which find the most excited always make
student
really want to
study
. The moods of a
student
before
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the lesson are important because the
behavior
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of leaner helps them absorb depth knowledge .
For instance
, the
student
who loves math always gets a high score at that
subject
and really want to find something harder and enhance their knowledge.
Furthermore
, the
subject
which
students
want to
study
can help them find relative jobs,
hence
students
are easy to get a high position and good salary on their career. In conclusion, all
subject
was quite needed for all
student
in their
study
but they should find their best
subject
to get more interesting
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them.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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