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Nowadays many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. what are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children?

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There is no doubt that these days,
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technology
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 has
play
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 a vital role in adult
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 and
also
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 in
children
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life
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 too. The question is, what is the
drowbacks
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drawbacks
drawback
 and the benefits of using
technology
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 through video
games
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 by
children
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. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss both advantage and disadvantage. In terms of advantages,
children
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 who play computer
games
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 are more
intellegent
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intelligent
 and capable
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cope
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 with new
technology
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. Because of the type of computerized game, the young people tend to
swich
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switch
 between their
finguers
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fingers
 in quick moves which
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 high attention. The other advantage is that gaming does not take to much space in the house or room. In the other words, if we compare
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electronic
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 with other
games
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, we will find that
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electronic
games
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 much smaller.
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,
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PlayStation
playstation
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a playstation
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 nowadays is a small gadget, so
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young people can play
in
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every where
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everywhere
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 like
their
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 own bedrooms.
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, there are many disadvantages
regarding
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to
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the
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children
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 who use video
games
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.
Firstly
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, the youngster who
are
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 playing
playstation
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PlayStation
tend
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 to
gaine
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gain
 weight comparing to active
children
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 which they are enjoying outdoor activity.
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, the gamers social
life
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 is so limited,
thus
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 they spend their time alone without any social
activtiy
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activity
.
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,
this
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may be
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 the coming generations. In conclusion, it is evident that there is some disadvantage, but there are advantages that improve
children
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life
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, In order to enhance their ability to use
technology
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. I do believe that video
games
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 help
children
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 to be
more
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smarter.
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