You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- years old child. write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in an advertisement in a weekly magazine, regarding

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stay at 40 Pennsylvania

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and child care for the period of April to September 2021. I found myself really excited when I saw

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blog because I

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struggling to get a job and

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feel

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homesick since I came to Australia.

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job will specifically favour me to deal with my major missing, my

5 years old

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5-year-old

sister who always preferred me around. Since I was the guardian of my sister, I have a better understanding of

kids

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behaviour, likes-dislikes and responsibilities.

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, my child care certification that I pursued from Matthews University and

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3 years of work experience in a similar domain

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upper

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hand to prove me a suitable candidate. Mentioning my leisure, I am a member of

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fitness" gym and I endeavour

myself

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to fitness by practising various strategies as guided by my personal trainer.

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, books are my best companion and I prefer spending most of my time with them. Should any

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details

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required, I attached my contact details with

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letter. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Ahmed

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Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

200 words

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The Greeting

Advertisements play a major role on TV in market economics. Despite the benefits of such information, many people criticize the role of TV advertising. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Some people think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of preschool age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that University students should specialise in a particular subject, while others believe that they should study a range of subjects discuss both the views and give your opinion.