Nowadays many people prefer to use their own cars to commute rather than buses and trains. Why do you think it is happening? What can government do to change it.

In the contemporary era, owning a car is not only a symbol of social status but
also
a necessity to travel by
people
instead
of using public transport. There are many reasons for
this
tendency and authorities should take some
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measure
measures
to overcome
this
problem. Fundamentally, two predominate factors leading
people
to choose their own conveyance than to
buses
and trains.
First
and foremost, many
people
find it very convenient and comfortable to commute with their families as
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to public transit.
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,
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the
buses
are too overcrowded, there is not enough place to sit.
Therefore
, in
this
case, if one
want
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to go
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a
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journey with family, does not find it
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mode of transport.
Secondly
,
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the journey
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by car is much flexible and free than to other modes of transit.
People
have
freedom
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to stop and take breaks at any place as well as at any point of time suitable to them.
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of
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abuse
buse
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, some
people
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not like to sit with a family with small kids as the crying and screaming of
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might
irrritate
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irritate
them.
Nevertheless
, there are several potential ways to increase the use of
buses
and trains.
To begin
with, the government ought to contribute some funds by making public transport comfortable
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everyone. To illustrate, by spending money, the number of
buses
can be extended so that it could be easily accessed by anyone and increasing the quantity will make them less crowded.
Furthermore
, the state should adopt some promotional methods to attract
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.
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, by offering discounts on special
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occasions
and providing cheap ticket prices for
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person, are
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some tricks that the authority can use to increase
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public travel. To recapitulate,
although
many
people
prefer to travel
by
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their own car for their personal reasons, some potential measure should be taken to extend and improve the services of public transportation.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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