Several countries disburse salaries to jobless persons on a specific time frame basis. Some may say that it shows a positive impact on society, but in my opinion, it shouldn’t be done because it creates laziness among them and decreases the rate of employment

In
this
era,
everthing
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everything
is getting so expensive day by day that normally can not afford the price of regular needs. Some countries like to pay their
nation
's
people
salaries if
they
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jobless. Some
people
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this
is
right
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decision and but my opinion is against
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this
point of view.
To begin
with, helping
nation
pupil in their bad time or especially in lockdown are become like
boon
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for them
for instance
, In the situation of Covid-19, lots of humans lost their jobs. Meanwhile,
government
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the government
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took the
first
initative
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initiative
to help their country
people
with some amount of salary for 3-months.
Moreover
,
this
step is
also
very helpful for old or senior citizens because some times they are not capable to control their expenses in their very old age and in
this
case,
this
is really helpful for them and shows a positive impact on society. According to my opinion,
this
kind of steps are not good for growing countries
for example
, if
government
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always ready to help their
nation
's pupil in their bad time and ready to pay their bills, that makes
people
lazy and
irresposible
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irresponsible
because they know if something to them or their country
then
government
always be ready to help them.
Moreover
,
sometime
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people
misuse
the
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government
facilities like
instead
of keeping safe their money, they do extravagant expenditure. In the end, the idea of
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salaries to jobless
people
is not bad but in some case that stops the growth or development of
nation
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the nation
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and makes country
people
lazy and irresponsible from their
resposiblies
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responsible
through
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their
nation
. In that case,
government
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the government
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should take care
both
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sides and take
a
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the
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right
decison
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decision
.
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