It is true that whilst many people use their public parks, this space could be used for other purposes, such as building houses for young people or developing a business area to create jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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should be maintained because the public

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portion to live in the

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a resting place for many people who live in the

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big building is not good for human life. People want to the space

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there are no cars and the place to avoid the complex things in the

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can not be compared with economic value. The public park is essential in the

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Your colleague has invited you to his farewell party. You will not be able to attend the party, write a letter to the friend. Explain the situation, Say why you will not be attending, Say something about the period you have worked together and his/her work.

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