It is true that whilst many people use their public parks, this space could be used for other purposes, such as building houses for young people or developing a business area to create jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I believe that
the
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public
parks
should be maintained because the public
parks
is
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a
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impaortant
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important
portion to live in the
city
for human life. The public
parks
provides
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a resting place for many people who live in the
city
. The children can learn the nature in the public
parks
.
Also
, the public
parks
is
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used for
animal
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to live.
The
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city
surrounded by
the
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big building is not good for human life. People want to the space
whare
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there are no cars and the place to avoid the complex things in the
city
. The public
parks
decrease the heat of
city
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. If there
is
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no
parks
in the
city
, abnormal nature phenomenon will be
occured
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occurred
. The value of
the
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public
parks
can not be compared with economic value. The public park is essential in the
city
.
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