The goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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It is thought by a majority of people that, to enhance the manufacturing of various things should be the major goal of
countries
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. Since it results in both blessings and curse to
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;
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essay aims to find the controversial issues related to
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of
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. It can be stated undoubtedly that, a country can never soar its development without boosting its material
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.
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, to meet the demands of
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ever
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growing population it needs to produce goods related to basic needs as food, clothing etc.
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world
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especially the least developed
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always feel
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pressure.
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, in order to alleviate poverty
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the country
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country
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there is
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constant stress of enhancing GDP which in turn demands
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continuous
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. Every nation wants to keep them abreast with the flow of globalization,
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tend to manufacture more and more materials. If
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local product can be exported
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example, foreign currency will be obtained and
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countries
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can catch the global market.
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,
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to increase
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may cause negative consequences. When a country is in the mode of boosting
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, it may often unaware of environmental soundness. More factories
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more wastes and if
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wastes cannot be managed carefully and properly, great havoc may occur
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as air pollution, water pollution etc.
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it is irony that high
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does not always suppose to eliminate
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the scarcity
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of people until the yields are properly distributed.
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, the principle of long term development lies
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the effective and efficient utilization of resources, not in
unwise
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surge of
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. It can be concluded that
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to cope with the modern era,
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have to emphasize
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producing more products. But they should
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think prudentially that
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must be sustainable and eco friendly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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