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Most Children want to watch the same TV programmes or play the same video games as their friends. Do you think parents should allow their children to do this ?

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From an ancient time, not only
children
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, all the species on earth learn various
things
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 from the surrounding atmosphere and from peer groups. Either they learn good habits or bad , but it is completely depending on what are they copied. So,
parents
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 involvement plays a very crucial role to control these
things
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 what are they watching. I think
parents
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 should restrict manifold
things
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 like which TV programmes and video games are suitable for their kids to watch and to play respectively.
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, small kids just grasp the
things
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 around them because their mind does not what is right or what is wrong. So,
parents
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 intervene should be required. For take an example, my son plays with other friends who have double age and try to imitate most of the
things
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 like TV programmes or playing video games, etcetera but he is only 5 years old so one of my family members always need to a company him and restrict them which are bad.
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, both the
parents
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 are working , there will no direct control over
children
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 in
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 case. Due to it, may
children
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 go astray in lack of supervision which can cause very bad effects on society
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 To prevent
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,
parents
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 or guardians must observe what their
children
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 do in their leisure time and have to control their watching or playing habits consciously.
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, I strongly opine that
parents
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 should restrict the habits of their
children
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.
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, they cannot watch or play, some programmes or video games which can create violence effect on young minds and draw them to do worst. To conclude,
parents
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 are responsible for their kid’s behaviour
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 they need to tackle it with almost care wisely.
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