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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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It is true that
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science
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 of
food
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 studies is a beneficial subject for the
students
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, while other people tend towards the viewpoint that school
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period
 is made to make the
students
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 learn sustainable
subjects
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. In my point of view, I would have to support the idea that
students
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 must use their school time studying other important
subjects
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. On one hand, there are clear arguments that studying
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science
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 of
food
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 and the way to prepare it is mandatory for the
students
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. One of the main reasons can be that
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curriculum
 can lead the
students
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 to have the best learning opportunity in several
feilds
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fields
 in different universities and institutions in the future.
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 means that
this
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 topic will increase the knowledge of the pupils in the
science
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 of
food
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 and may provide
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 a flourished background about it. Another reason can be that
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 subject will give them
a vast information
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 about
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the secrets
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 of
food
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For instance
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, the
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 can know the contrast between healthy and unhealthy
food
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 from their knowledge about
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science
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 of
food
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.
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, it is often argued that in fact, there are uncountable
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might
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 be the most important for the
students
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. One of the major reasons can be that learning a language in the school will increase the way of
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communication between the
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.
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, learning Maths will raise
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 intelligence rate. A particularly good example here is that
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 that are doing great in calculations might have the highest IQ in the world. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, In my opinion, I think that various
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 are
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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