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The best way for the government to solve the traffic congestion problems in cities is to provide free bus service 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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congestion problems of
traffic
 in cities are severe for citizens, which could make people spend long
hours
 on the road.
However
, free bus
service
 of 24
hours
 a day or 7 days a week maybe provide one solution for the issue of
traffic
,but I disagree
this
 idea could be used as the major and effective way only, and opinions will be discussed in
this
 essay.
Firstly
,the peak time of
traffic
 jam is limited and fixed, there is no necessary to run over transportation in the evening until midnight.
For example
, the majority of young people usually go to firms around 9am in the morning, and go back
home
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 about 7pm. Specifically,the transportations during
this
 period obviously are crowded.Meanwhile, there are almost no citizens to take the subway or buses after 11pm,because most people prefer to stay at home rather than being outside for
this
 duration.
Therefore
, the free bus
service
 is not required at all, it would only waste investment for transportation by the government to keep the
service
 run over.
Secondly
, to build up more routes of
traffic
 is more useful than providing the bus
service
 on 24
hours
, especially to innovate the more advanced technology may help better for the
traffic
 issue.
For instance
, flying cars mentioned by scientists since many years ago, these agenda offer the idea of cars could fly in the sky which provides a shorter distance of road and less time for passengers. To conclude,there are multiple reasons that could affect the
traffic
 problems in cities-to provide a free
service
 for 24
hours
 is surely a positive suggestion,
however
,
this
 is not effective for the issue, the more new ideas should encourage to give more agendas for
this
 problem in the future.
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