It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is important for
children
to distinguish between right and wrong
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age. Some would argue that
punishment
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kids
to learn from the mistake. It is agreed that
punishment
is necessary for the
kids
to change the behaviour and learn from their error.
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first
discuss that
parents
and teachers should monitor incessantly and correct them, and
then
discuss that
punishment
should not be physical or emotional, followed by a logical conclusion.
Children
are most vulnerable to get affected by surrounding and digital media. It is often getting painful for the
parents
and teachers to observe what they watch on the internet or smart devices.
Hence
it is mandatory for the
parents
and teacher to teach the dangers of online activity and how to conduct themselves properly. It is often the case that
children
may hesitate to discuss their problem with their
parents
or teachers.
Therefore
, it is imperative to block inimical sites from their view which has a possibility of exploiting the
kids
.
For example
, as per
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from Oxford University government had seen
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% drop in online exploitation after the introduction of "social behaviour cases". Despite
this
, many
children
continue their wrong deeds, so
punishment
is inevitable to correct them. When
parents
and teacher try to discipline their
kids
, they should be very conscious that they do not affect them mentally. Many
parents
support
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corporal punishments which may affect young people mentally and physically and starts developing an aversion.
Instead
, they can speak with them
first
and try to make them understand the consequences of their action.
For example
, as per the Indian government recent survey, the pupils who go through
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physical assault
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age has a more chance of getting arrogant when they grow up.
Therefore
, the government had passed a law to cease
the
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physical
punishment
in schools. In conclusion, it is crucial for
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children
to learn about right and wrong at a young age.
Although
punishment
is needed to correct them,
parents
should be vigilant about the impact of the external surroundings and correct
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affecting them mentally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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