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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
 claim that it is important to
study
 the
science
 of
food
 and how to prepare it at
school
 while other
people
 believe that important
subjects
 should be learned at schools.
Although
 learning important
subjects
such
 as English and History is important, I consider learning the
science
 of
food
 and how to prepare
meals
 should be taught at
school
. Many
people
 believe that children should
study
 the
science
 of
food
 and in fact, the
science
 of
food
 is taught at
school
 in many countries. When I was a student in Japan, I had a
subject
 only for learning the
science
 of
food
 and how to handle
food
 properly. It is great for
students
 to learn
this
subject
 when they are smaller as they realize how important it is to appreciate
food
. By studying
this
subject
,
students
 are
also
 able to learn how to prepare healthy
meals
 without any support from adults.
However
, other
people
 discuss
students
 should learn important
subjects
 at
school
. Schools need to be where
students
study
 important
subjects
 and they should not use their
school
 time for something that they can learn at home or on the internet.
Students
 go to
school
 to learn important
subjects
 that will be useful to pursue their
further
 education and careers. In my opinion, it is great to
study
 the
science
 of
food
 at
school
. Many
people
 do not know how to prepare healthy
meals
 at home even after they become adults. In order to prepare healthy
meals
, you do not only need to know
receips
Correct your spelling
receipts
, but
also
 nutrition in each
ingredients
Change to a singular noun
ingredient
show examples
. If you do not have the knowledge of nutrition,
meals
 can be unhealthy even if you try to cook healthy
meals
. To conclude
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
,
although
 some
people
 claim that
students
 should
study
important
Add an article
the important
an important
show examples
subject
 at
school
,
students
 can
also
 benefit from learning the
science
 of
food
 and how to prepare it.
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