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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. to some extent 1: metro train , reduce time , traffic , pollution 2: more buses , to reach every place , flights , taxi

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It is an undeniable fact that the population is increasing
day
 by
day
. As compared to the golden era, today we have many
facilities
 available to commute from one place to another.
However
, in some rapidly growing countries, a certain individual thinks that the government should spend large fundings to introduce new fast railway lines,
other
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 holds the totally different opinion that they should improve the current public transport
facilities
. According to my point of view, these viewpoints are justifiable to some extend. On the one hand, growing cities demand more transport
facilities
 with very fast service. Even though there are many
trains
 available for local
people
 to commute but it takes more time to reach a destination,
in addition
 , their frequency is
also
 low.
For example
, In my home country India, Mumbai is the most populated
city
 because there are many chances of employment in every sector. The
city
 has poor
facilities
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trains
 frequency and they are very slow as it
takes
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 stops at every station.
Instead
 of utilizing these
trains
,
people
 prefer to use their own vehicle as a consequence ,
,
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currently
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 the
city
 is facing more traffic and its pollution index is raising
day
 by
day
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 of our society believe that
instead
 of constructing the new railway lines they should be more focused to improve the existing
facilities
.
People
 believe that they should improve bus frequencies because as compared to
trains
, buses covers many stations in a
city
. To illustrate my point
further
 , the conditions of these buses and
trains
 are very poor,
hence
 government needs to emphasise its regular service and inspection. To put it in a nuts shell , I pen down saying that,
people
's opinion varies based on their circumstances. According to ,
me
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 both the views has its own importance and the government should consider
people
's opinion and problems before making any decisions.
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