A “cashless society” is one where people use debit/credit cards and other forms of payment. Do the advantages of a cashless society outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no denying that paperless transaction is getting popular all over the world due to its paramount importance. Due to
this
, there is a list of positive impacts,
although
, some
people
may have some contradictory views regarding the same, which will be discussed in
this
essay. Due to the advancement in technology,
economy
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is booming at a higher rate.
For instance
,
people
can make various transactions during one day, just by using their debit or credit
cards
. The pins used in the
cards
act
like
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an account number and password, so that they can purchase or sell goods from anywhere across the world.
Secondly
, these modes of transacting money can pave
way
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to a faster, reliable and secure banking world. If these methods are adopted,
then
the
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society can refrain from withdrawing cash and thereby reducing time and efforts. On the paradoxical side, there are less developed places where
people
either do not understand how to make use of these
cards
or the technology is not yet developed.
Hence
,
people
prefer traditional methods like using cash or a cheque to purchase goods.
For instance
, farmers in
the
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developing countries still use barter or cash system to make a transaction rather than these advanced means. To encapsulate these issues, without any doubt, I feel that the advantages of a cashless era
overtakes
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the negative parts because of the aforementioned reasons.
Although
,
people
and governments are spreading awareness to encourage citizens to make use of
cards
and other means of modern technology to help
the
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society grow.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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