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Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years. This has led to a rise in traffic congestion. What could governments and individuals do to reduce congestion?

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In
21st
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 century, as
world’s
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the world’s
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 population has risen
consumeration
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consumerization
 of private
cars
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 increased leading to
traffic
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congestion
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. In my
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perspective
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prospective
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perspective
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, using public transport
for
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 a solution is not effective,
therefore
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, government and individuals could find more successful ways to reduce
congestion
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. Building upper and lower level roads in the highways decrease the
number
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 of
cars
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 creating
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traffic
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a traffic
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 jam. Eastern Asian countries as South Korea and Japan built multiple levels. On the road to avoid crowding of
cars
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. In that way, people driving
to
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 one direction won’t face congestions.
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 of expanding road by using free lands,
this
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 way will be effective for any country to reduce
congestion
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.
Problem
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 of hiring a
car
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 offers
practical
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a practical
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 choice for drivers shortening the usage of private
cars
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.
User
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The user
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 could get a
car
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 by an app for a time and
then
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 others could hire the same
car
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 which will reduce the
number
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 of
cars
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 in the city. In my opinion, if the program will have
affordable
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 price and comfort many people will use the offer
instead
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 of purchasing
cars
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 of their own.
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, if there are only
few
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cars
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traffic
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congestion
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 won’t
be risen
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rise
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. To sum up, government and individuals by working together can shorten the
number
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 of private
cars
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. If
rebuilding
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the rebuilding
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 of roads will allow to reduce
traffic
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 jam, not owing but hiring a
car
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 decreases the
number
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 of
cars
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. In
the
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 similar way, people can avoid congestions on the highways.
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