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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life.Others think that is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 work in
same
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 company throughout their life,
however
, some
people
 would like to change companies. I believe, working in a different
organization
 is a good idea rather than staying in one
organization
 for their carrier.
Firstly
,
people
 spending their entire carrier in one company are not able to diversify their
skills
. They are not able to gain knowledge of different
technology
.
For example
, a software developer working in a particular company always works for specific
technology
 like java.He may not get a chance to explore other
technology
 or computer language.
Secondly
, working experience with different companies gives an advantage of high earning, while joining
new
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organization
, one can negotiate for compensation. In
this
way
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 it is
good
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a good
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 way to keep earning high and maintain
lifestyle
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.
In addition
of
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this
 will give a chance
of
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 exploring different location and some time multiple countries. Multinational companies allow working their employees overseas.
Lastly
,
People
 with the same
organization
 feel in their comfort zone and might not able to learn or enhance their
skills
. Because they are using the same
technology
 and method for years.They hesitate to adopt new
technology
 and become stale.These days we have
lot
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 of competition in
market
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the market
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 and it demands to keep
ourself
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ourselves
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 up to date. With more
skills
 and depth knowledge increase the chance of getting job easily and help to stay out of crowed. To conclude,
People
 should change their job, while considering carrier goals and income standards.As in
same
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organization
, the growth opportunities are limited and
skills
 stale at some point. Though in the same
organization
 chances of promotion is high but the hike is always limited.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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