Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so ?

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In recent years, there has been

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increase in

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children

working

part times

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jobs. On one side of the

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there are those who believe

children

should not

work

during

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time.

However

, others, oppose

this

idea and believe students gain experience and learn to balance

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and

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work

. I strongly believe, having a side job along studying has both benefits and drawbacks.

To begin

, there is an argument to be made that when

children

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young age of studying they can get exhausted from working and find it difficult to focus on learning.

Nonetheless

, despite the risk of tiredness and a negative impact on studying, there is a growing body of evidence to suggest that

children

who start working at an early age, have more experience in the field of

work

and have a better outlook on juggling

work

and school-

work

. To conclude from the aforementioned discussion,

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Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so ?

Fully explain your ideas

With the increased global demand in oil amd gas, undiscovered areas of world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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