Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so ?

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jobs. On one side of the
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there are those who believe
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should not
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time.
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idea and believe students gain experience and learn to balance
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. I strongly believe, having a side job along studying has both benefits and drawbacks.
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young age of studying they can get exhausted from working and find it difficult to focus on learning.
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, despite the risk of tiredness and a negative impact on studying, there is a growing body of evidence to suggest that
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who start working at an early age, have more experience in the field of
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and have a better outlook on juggling
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. To conclude from the aforementioned discussion,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • punctuality
  • work ethic
  • financial literacy
  • budgeting
  • time management
  • work experience
  • career prospects
  • independence
  • self-esteem
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • academic responsibilities
  • school performance
  • hobbies
  • relaxation
  • well-being
  • stress
  • fatigue
  • premature adulthood
  • childhood experiences
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